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These are great suggestions! I like that you brought more of the conflict from the story into the revised query and also made it a stronger pitch from the start. I learn so much from these break downs! :-)

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I'm so happy you've found them helpful, Jackie!

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Your suggestions totally turned my opinion of the story and created a lot more tension that the original did. Hopefully, one day I'll be able to also have you spruce me up and up my chances for a request.

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Hey Teace! I'm so glad the analysis provided insight for you and thank you for your feedback! Hit me up when you're ready to query. I'm sure we can make it work. :-)

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